Tuesday, September 14, 2010

Essay 1

My name is Guamaral but I’d like to be called as Maralaa. I’m 19 years old. I was born in zavhan. I grew up in a happy family. My family consists of 5 members. I’m first child and the only girl among my 2 brothers in my family and my childhood days more colorful.
I’m little short and build. I have got dark hair, medium dark eyes and white skin. I think I’m responsible, hard working, kind and funny. Because my friends talk about me “Maralaa is kind, helpful,hard working and funny”.
My family and religions are all of beliefs Buddist. Therefore I’m a little buddist.
I extremely like table tennis, eat ice-ream, and meet my friends. I also love to watch film, listen to music or visiting to my friends house in my spare time. Other than that, I love to travel as . My family and I always spend our holidays to go to new places whether it's in our country..

I took Information technology while I was in secondary school. After I graduated, I study as a information technology in SHUTIS university. I like my profession and lessons. Exactly our professional lessons and languages are I really like. Sometimes it’s very difficult. In the future I’m working in my own profession. And I want to be built my own software company. Then I’d help a hundreds of, a millions of poor, homeless and jobless people.
I’ll supply a work situation this people. And save our country's nature. Especially gold’s company. Then I’ll clear parlament members because they don’t know their job and they didn’t enough knowledge their sector. But it’s very difficult. If I will very reach person it’s possible.

I know that the road ahead will not be easy for me, but I cannot stop here. I need to move on in order to reach my goals. In my opinion “ my success in the future lies in my own hands”.

1 comment:

  1. Your essay is very simple to read and very comprehensive to novice english learners. Sentences are short and you used appropriate vocabularies to describe the process. In overall, your essay is in good condition except some punctuation, sentence order,subject verb agreement and some verb tense issues. However, I think essays like yours are very well as you are a young english learner in Mongolia. :)

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